While younger people have more energy, older people have more time and money( in some cases ) to spend. Nevertheless, on whether young people enjoy or older people enjoy depends on the particular person that is being talked about and what kind of ' enjoyment ' is talked about.
Firstly, in the case of younger generation, if we consider those who are rich, in particular whose parents are rich, they will have enough money which they can spend on various sources of enjoyment like doing parties, going on trips to various parts of world, buying gadgets, clothes, etc. While this notion of enjoyment is subjective, it is mostly this in many young kids. On the other hand, younger people who lack this sort of financial freedom will have to forego this enjoyment and can be said that they enjoy life less.
Additionally, if younger generation with a salaried income are considered, they will have money to afford this enjoyment but they lack quality amount of time to spend on such enjoyments like going on vacation, etc. These can be described as not enjoying life. However, we must note that some people of this category manage it very well to make it to enjoy life as they intend it to.
On the other hand, if the older generation is considered, time is not the factor to them in deciding whether or not to have enjoyment since most of the older people will have time in their hands. So, it comes down to the next two things in deciding, money and energy. While some of the older people have enough money and resources, if they have carefully managed their financials during their adult age, others do not. In a similar way, people who have cared about their physical fitness during youth will have good health and energy in their old age. Such people who have both money and energy in their old age can enjoy life since they do not have to depend on anyone for any thing and can do whatever their notion of enjoyment is.
However, the notions dicussed above mostly deal with enjoyment being a materialistic thing. On the contrary to it, to some people, enjoyment can mean many different things. For example, for a young boy who has dependent parents, enjoyment might mean providing everything to his parents and taking care of them. He can get happiness from doing just that. In this case, even though he has no money to afford on other expensive sources of enjoyment, he can described as one enjoying life. Similarly for an old person, even without energy and money, seeing his grand kids and playing with them might mean enjoyment and he is said to be enjoying more than an younger man who goes to parties, etc.
To sum up, as discussed above, it is really not easy to determine whether young people or older people enjoy life more. It heavily depends on notions of enjoyment, and the sources that lead to it that determines the amount of enjoyment one gets in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, really, similarly, so, well, while, for example, in particular, kind of, sort of, in some cases, on the contrary, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67322834646 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30132844075 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433070866142 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8674671173 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.047619048 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1904761905 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.04761904762 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32590133592 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116458456943 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861690646407 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209440556307 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791392513808 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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