Burning mirror integrated essay
Reading and lecture talks existence of weapon called burning mirror in Roman navy. Author mention that there is no evidence to prove this story. While lecture claims doubt made in reading by giving logical explanation as follows:
First, reading states that Greeks were not intelligent to make such complex tool. Author adds making burning mirror that requires sophisticated technique to make parabola out of use large copper polished sheet was nearly impossible at that time. While, professor challenges this point asserted in reading. She claims that Greeks would had made dozens of small polished copper to form parabola. She thinks that they were expert in creating this unique shape.
Second, reading mention that this method of destroying sheep very much time consuming. Reading also sates that there is no way that Roman ship could had be static for long duration to make it effective. Lecture casts doubt on this statement made in reading. She refutes that it takes ten minutes for wood to catch fire. She says that ship was not made up of only wood, while with other sticky material called pitch which can easily burn. As s result, this weapon is very advantageous in defence.
Third, reading points out that there was no need to have another weapons as they had similar tools called flaming arrows. Reading suggests both instrument almost have same effect there was nothing extraordinary about burning mirrors. In contrast, lecture posits that burning mirror was better because flame was invisible. In addition she thinks that it is very effective if enemies cannot spot the flame and that is not possible in case of flaming arrows. This is how lecture successfully casts doubt on points made in reading.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t to make such complex tool. Author adds making burning mirror that requires soph...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires sophisticated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'sophisticating' or 'to be sophisticated'.
Suggestion: sophisticating; to be sophisticated
...ds making burning mirror that requires sophisticated technique to make parabola out of use ...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rning mirror that requires sophisticated technique to make parabola out of use la...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eet was nearly impossible at that time. While, professor challenges this point assert...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ond, reading mention that this method of destroying sheep very much time consumin...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...t there is no way that Roman ship could had be static for long duration to make it ...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ere is no way that Roman ship could had be static for long duration to make it eff...
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Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... better because flame was invisible. In addition she thinks that it is very effective if...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, third, while, in addition, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 283.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09187279152 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31549353697 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579505300353 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2171394861 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0555555556 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 7.06452816374 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102206817596 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346317092752 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062056711449 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722842832631 0.162205337803 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028845985035 0.0443174109184 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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