The passage states the causes and the consequences of asthma attacks. However, the professor does not totally agree with the causes and the consequences.
First, the passage posits that during asthma temporary inflammation of the airways occurs and after each episode of asthma the airways return to normal. However, the lecturer refutes this point by saying that airways do not return to normal, instead, airway tubes become permanently narrow and the walls thicken, which is due to long term inflammation.
Second, the passage states that the consequence of the asthma is remodeling of the tubes. But, the lecturer suggests that remodeling of the airways is the cause of asthma attack, not the consequence. The professor suggests that
Third, The passage only suggests the environmental factors for asthma, however, the lecturer includes environmental as well as genetic as factors for an asthma attack.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...consequence. The professor suggests that Third, The passage only suggests the env...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second, so, third, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 22.412803532 27% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 30.3222958057 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 1373.03311258 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 142.0 270.72406181 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44366197183 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 4.04702891845 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77143769396 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 74.0 145.348785872 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 419.366225166 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7707934682 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.428571429 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0642377490127 0.272083759551 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030531205148 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320394091437 0.0662205650399 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0374770081667 0.162205337803 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013227050996 0.0443174109184 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 63.6247240618 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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