Integrated task: Private fossil collectors
The passage is about selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, by private collectors and its negative impacts. The speaker in the lecture tries to refute the points made in the reading by stating that the advantages outweighs the negative sides.
Firstly, the passage states that due to selling to the private collectors, the public suffers by loosing access to see the fossils and this could lead to decline in the interest of public in fossil. But, in the lecture this claim was opposed by stating that public now has greater exposure to fossils because of this buying and selling. She argues that, more fossils are now avialable due to increased exploration and more smaller institutes like schools are now being able to buy small fossils which they can display to the public. Thus public is having more exposure to fossils than before.
Secondly, the passaed stresses upon the point that as the fossils go to the private collectors, the scientists miss opportutnities to make importatnt discoveries by studying them. The lecture goes against this point by saying that, althought the private collectors might acquire the fossils but the value of the fossils is determined by experts on fossils. In this case, the scientists. Thus they get the opportunity to carefully and thoroughly examine the fossils before they go to the private collectors. Thus, the scientists does not miss out on important scientific experiment with the fossils.
Finally, the passage states the commercial fossil collectors do not have trainings and often destroy important scientific evidence surrounding the fossil. The lecture points out that, althought this might be true to some extent but due to commercial approach more fossils are being discovered. Then, she argues that it is better to have a little damage to the surroundings of a fossil than not finding it at all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'smaller' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: smaller
...alable due to increased exploration and more smaller institutes like schools are now being a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s which they can display to the public. Thus public is having more exposure to fossi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... fossils. In this case, the scientists. Thus they get the opportunity to carefully a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 308.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1461038961 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66498719918 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 474.3 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0874674604 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.214285714 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06452816374 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267014202767 0.272083759551 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979496233129 0.0996497079465 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743920212093 0.0662205650399 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163547287437 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489920233789 0.0443174109184 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.