The reading passage discusses about problems associated with travel to the mars and in the lecture,the professor gives solutions to solve the problem.She states traveling to the Mars is challenging but by these solutions it could be possible and could be managed.
First of all, the speaker claims that by the new method of planting and growing crops in water which is called hydropunic, astronomers can produce food crops in the space and cultivate them in little space.Also by this method the plant can use co2 of the air and produce oxygen for them and they can solve the problem of long time being in the space.Furthermore, they can recycle water and reuse the water with special tools in the cabins.
Moreover, the professor states by several technics astronomers can solve the problem of zero gravity which can hurt their body and health.By testing in other spacecraft orbitting around the earth, they found that several exercises can prevent these harmful effects and taking calcium tablet can increase the decline of bone mass due to zero gravity.
Lastly, the lecturer says dangerous level of space radiation which the reading points out is not constant and it happenes occationally. She states by monitoring this radiation and using sheild which is not heavy, astronomer can protect themselves in the time of dangerous radiation from the sun . So, these can keep them safe.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also
...pace and cultivate them in little space.Also by this method the plant can use co2 of...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...pace and cultivate them in little space.Also by this method the plant can use co2 of...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...problem of long time being in the space.Furthermore, they can recycle water and reuse the w...
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...ty which can hurt their body and health.By testing in other spacecraft orbitting a...
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Suggestion: .
...time of dangerous radiation from the sun . So, these can keep them safe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, lastly, moreover, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1159.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 229.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06113537118 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65313239986 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558951965066 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 21.2450331126 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 137.388035222 49.2860985944 279% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.166666667 110.228320801 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.1666666667 21.698381199 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 7.06452816374 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0824100927268 0.272083759551 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439650071487 0.0996497079465 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983087446158 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659475107231 0.162205337803 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114224439205 0.0443174109184 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.3589403974 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.0289183223 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.7273730684 252% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.498013245 164% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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