T P O-06 - Integrated Writing Task Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are in many respects like traditional printed encyclopedias collections of articles on various subjects. What is speci

The passage discusses several important problems of communal online encyclopedias over traditionaly printed encyclopedias. The professor, on the other hand, casts some doubts on those problems, and provides her thoughts.

Firstly, the author assumes lack academic credentials, since the online contributer are not the specialists in the topic who are capable of supply the information correctly. However, the professor states that it is hard to find the wrong information from those online encyclopedias. Additionally, she thinks that traditional ones might be wrong, even worse, as they are printed, the wrong information remains there forever.

Secondly, the passage argues about the hacker problem in which the information can easily be changed from its original form and corrupted. The lecturer, in contrary, gives a technique, as an example, for scientists to format their crutial articles uniquely to protect from corruption. Moreover, she suggested a solution to eliminate hackers that monitoring the changes in the online encyclopedias.

Thirdly, the author makes an assertion on the bias on content provided by the online encyclopedias would affect younger ages. On the other hand, the professor dismesses the assertion and shows the space limitation for all of the content, so those authors choose the most important information to write. According to the professor, additionally, online encyclopedias allow many students to read in wider range of subjects than traditional encyclopedias.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tion and shows the space limitation for all of the content, so those authors choose the mo...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 223.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77130044843 5.08290768461 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1495275549 2.5805825403 122% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62331838565 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.1698534994 49.2860985944 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 117.0 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06452816374 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152661059451 0.272083759551 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572304688135 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508027688293 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088854943152 0.162205337803 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310425766483 0.0443174109184 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 53.8541721854 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.0289183223 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.2367328918 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.42419426049 118% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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