Toefl integrated writing TPO 1
The reading article claims that dams are incredible engineering marvels that represent one of the most beneficial and effective forms of electricity creation today and gives three reasons for that. However, the lecturer casts doubt on each point of the article and claims that are many drawbacks of dams and gives three reasons for that.
Firstly, the article states that dams are positively impact the environment. In contrast, the lecturer casts doubt on this point by stating that environment suffers because of dams. In addition, the lecturer adds that dams make messy structure because of worker who worked for dams. Dams create the significant problem with natural water flow. Once the dam’s work is finished, the water flow become slower. This create problem with migrating fish population. It will affect reproduction capacity of fishes who require fast water flow.
Secondly, the article avers that the power generated from a dam produces no harmful pollutants. However, the lecturer contradicts this point by saying that dams contribut pollution. Furthermore, he adds that dams create flood in lakes. Because of this lake flooding, vegetation will be died. This will affect in Carbon dioxide gas absorption. Dams also relese methane gas which is global warming gas. These both gases will effect increase pollution.
Finally, the article posits that dams create no financial burden for the community. On the othe hand, the lecturer challenges this point by mentioning that area must be relocated where owner who buy property near dams. This would expense a lot of money, so this is not cheap. This relocating area must be needed government aid to pay taxt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'impacted'.
Suggestion: impacted
...article states that dams are positively impact the environment. In contrast, the lect...
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Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...obal warming gas. These both gases will effect increase pollution. Finally, the artic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, in addition, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25373134328 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5367207385 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574626865672 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9653892175 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4 110.228320801 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4 21.698381199 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 53.8541721854 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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