The reading and the lecture are both about whether we should use electronic medical record systems to replace paper when doctors record patients' medical information. The author of the article feels that it is a good adoption for three reasons. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the article. Her position is that it is uncertain to say that the electronic systems is a perfectly revolution.
First and foremost, according to the reading, one of the advantages is the reducing of costs. The article mentions that it can save money by reducing the expense of storing and transferring medical records. Besides, doctors can get the records whenever and wherever they want. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that it would not present the advantages significantly and it still has to pay the paper cost. Additionally, she points out that, for the emergency and illegal reasons, doctors will not throw the paper records after examining the patients.
Secondly, the author suggests that it is helpful to avoid some medical mistakes, such as Illegible handwriting and wrong transcription of data. In the article, it is said that the standardization of the computer fonts can decrease the possibility of making wrong consequence which is bad for patients. The lecturer, however, asserts that the situation of making records by hand when examining will not change, so the appearance of poor handwriting still exists. She goes on to say the stuff member may still record wrong data in electronic medical record systems.
Finally, the author posits that the the system can aim for medical research though making full use of countless data information. The author contends that the data become easy to access because the databases can format for data collection. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is that due to the private law and the difficult of obtaining the patients' permission. , it is hard to realize use patients' data. She notes that the Unite States has strict rules for patients data protection and most of patients are only willing to using records when they do some medical treatment rather than purposeful research.
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- TOEFL T P O 46 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t is a good adoption for three reasons. The lecturer disputes the claims made in th...
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Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('perfectly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('revolution') instead of another adjective.
...n to say that the electronic systems is a perfectly revolution. First and foremost, according to th...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ems. Finally, the author posits that the the system can aim for medical research tho...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ems. Finally, the author posits that the the system can aim for medical research tho...
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Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lecturers'' or 'lecturer's'?
Suggestion: lecturers'; lecturer's
...t for data collection. In contrast, the lecturers stance is that due to the private law a...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
... law and the difficult of obtaining the patients permission. , it is hard to realize use...
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Line 7, column 362, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t of obtaining the patients permission. , it is hard to realize use patients data...
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Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...alize use patients data. She notes that the Unite States has strict rules for patients da...
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Line 7, column 487, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the patients') or simply say ''most patients''.
Suggestion: most of the patients; most patients
... rules for patients data protection and most of patients are only willing to using records when ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, as to, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 351.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15384615385 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73503718369 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 419.366225166 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.658883853 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2105263158 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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