TOEFL Writing Task 1
From what has been indicated in the requirements and the talk, a newspaper
selection comittee were in the progress of choosing one between the two
finalists for their scholarship award. There were three main components to
consider: the candidate's major and grades, their social activities and community
activities.
First factor was the two finalist's major and grades. They both wanted to be a
professional journalist after graduation; however, their majors are not the same.
Becky majored in Journalism while Routh majored in Biology. They both took
Journalism classes, and they both receive grade A for all of these classes. Rough
overall GPA may be higher since he had straight A through, while Becky had
half A and half B.
The second one would be their proactiveness in social activities. They both
spent quite a lot of time on campus. Becky played music in the school orchestra,
attended sports events. On the other hand, Routh seemed to be more active in
research activities and he spent most of his campus time in the lab.
The last but not least factor was their community service. Becky did volunteer
work at the local hospital and elderly center. And Routh participated in local
supporting events.
In general,these two finalist are considerably equal in comparison with each
other over the set of cri.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 19, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...campus time in the lab. The last but not least factor was their community service. Bec...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 23, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , these
... local supporting events. In general,these two finalist are considerably equal in ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, second, so, while, in general, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 12.0772626932 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26605504587 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84406629165 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605504587156 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4903839523 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5333333333 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5333333333 21.698381199 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06452816374 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.09492273731 415% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 53.8541721854 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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