The lecture claims that shorter workweek could have a negative impact on both company and individuals. This does agree with that of the passage, which suggests that 4-day workweek could benefit.
To begin with, according to the lecture, company will spend more money when they give the option of shorter workweek to the employees as the result of hiring new employees, which means the cost on training and medical care, as well as the office occupation of the staff will increase. Instead of recruiting new staff, company would choose the option that asking their original workers to work overtime a day to make up the fifth workday or requiring the staff to work as well as 5 workdays when they have one less day. On the contrary, the passage argues that 4-day workweek will promote the profits because of employees feel more comfortable and make fewer error. Moreover, it won’t cost more money because the company could hire new employees with the wages that are eighty percent of the normal rates, resulting in fewer overworked and error-prone employees that can boost the profit. Since more employees are hired, the unemployment rates will be decreased.
The second point of difference between the lecture and the passage concerns the life quality of the individual employee. The lecture asserts that the quality of individual employee will go down in terms of their job satisfaction. Employee choosing a shorter workweek would like to be the first consideration to get fired. In addition, they usually not the ones who are considered to fit management roles because a management place requires longer workdays to deal with the administrative tasks. However, the passage contends that individual employee’s life quality will increase as the result of enjoying their extra time.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Not in a correct format. Need three doubts.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 293 250
No. of Characters: 1466 1200
No. of Different Words: 150 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.137 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.523 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.885 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, well, in addition, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16438356164 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65547689041 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530821917808 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1779210909 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452947792145 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154913250429 0.0996497079465 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762287767633 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264373249065 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121967008629 0.0443174109184 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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