TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

The reading and the lecture are both about the dinosaurs.Whereas the author of the reading states that dinosaurs were endothermic reptiles, the lecture suggests that dinosaurs were not endothermic reptiles.
The lecture casts doubt on the pain point made in the reading by providing three reasons.

First of all, according to the reading, fossils found in the polar region is a first evidence that dinosaurs were endothermic.For example, only those animal that maintain the body temperature with its surrounding can be lived in such cold regions.
However, the lecture disputes this point.
He says that finding fossils cannot be the evidence that they were endothermic as they might have migrated during the cold season to next regions.

Secondly, the reading states that the leg position under the body indicate that there is a connection between position of leg with the movement of the leg which is a feature of the endothermic animals.For an instance, leg position under the body helps animals for physical activity like running which is adapted by most of the mammals who were endothermic.
Nevertheless, the lecture refutes this argument.
He argues that position of the leg under the body does not mean they were high energy endothermic.As they were positioned to support the heavy weight of the dinosaurs.

Finally, the reading claims that presence of Haversian canals in bone is a strong indicator that dinosaurs is endothermic.For example, presence of the canals in bone structure allow living organism to grow quickly and rapid body growth.
on the other hand, the lecture believe that haversian canal with a growth ring symbolize that dinosaurs were not endothermic.He thinks that having a growth ring in the bone stops the growth of the body.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23943661972 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81168531148 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503521126761 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.5892002342 49.2860985944 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.8 110.228320801 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 7.06452816374 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.09492273731 244% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475167372975 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1601821172 0.0996497079465 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108200844937 0.0662205650399 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1601821172 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108200844937 0.0443174109184 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.3589403974 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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