TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

The article states that  birds populations will continue to decline and provides three reasons of supports. However, the professor refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading avers that since human populations and settlements continue to expand,  birds natural habitats will continue to disappear as a result. The professor, on the other hand, explains that this point is true but only for some types of birds. She explains that building, housing areas are better habitats for large species of birds, such as seagulls, pigeons, hawks, falcons and so on. Therefore,  the professor concludes the decline in birds populations is going to be  uniform  in the future, as the author would like us to believe, but some populations may shrink, but others will grow.

Second, the article claims that the growth of agriculture, as response to growing health populations, will also result in the further destruction of birds habitats. Conversely, the professor disagree with point by stating that the increase in agricultural activities are done by using less lands. The agriculture growth has already increased by introducing of more productive varieties of crops. These new crops produce more food per unit of area, so there is no need to convert and use wilderness areas for agricultural purpose.

Third, the reading posits that chemical pesticides gets into the water and into the food chains for birds where they can harm birds. Even they do not kill them, they affect their reproduction process. The professor refutes this point by saying people are aware of dangerous of tradition pesticides . Now,  pesticides have been developed and will continue to do so in the future. This new pesticides differ from that in the past in two distinctive features: The first one, new and  less toxic than before . Also, develop more pest resistant crops  that actually become less attractive to pests. Therefore, people will reduce the need for chemical pesticides. Moreover,  these crops do not cause any harm for birds growing pesticides that resistant to pests, in addition to, become less harm to birds species which is pretty important.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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The article states that  birds populations will continue to decli...
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...ions and settlements continue to expand,  birds natural habitats will continue to ...
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Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ns, hawks, falcons and so on. Therefore,  the professor concludes the decline in b...
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Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...line in birds populations is going to be  uniform  in the future, as the author wo...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...irds populations is going to be  uniform  in the future, as the author would like ...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun lands is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ricultural activities are done by using less lands. The agriculture growth has alrea...
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Line 7, column 298, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...are of dangerous of tradition pesticides . Now,  pesticides have been developed an...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...dangerous of tradition pesticides . Now,  pesticides have been developed and will ...
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Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...inctive features: The first one, new and  less toxic than before . Also, develop m...
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Line 7, column 504, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...rst one, new and  less toxic than before . Also, develop more pest resistant crops...
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Line 7, column 546, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... Also, develop more pest resistant crops  that actually become less attractive to ...
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Line 7, column 668, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... need for chemical pesticides. Moreover,  these crops do not cause any harm for bi...
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Line 7, column 794, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'bird'.
Suggestion: bird
...ts, in addition to, become less harm to birds species which is pretty important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, as for, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49101796407 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12725542192 2.5805825403 121% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 145.348785872 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586826347305 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7378757036 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.888888889 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77777777778 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.545090680128 0.272083759551 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145991954954 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980268422343 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293918470966 0.162205337803 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610999920739 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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