TPO-21 Integrated Writing
Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, grow faster, or withstand adverse conditions. Planting genetically modified trees on a large scale promises to bring a number of benefits.
First, genetically modified trees are designed to be hardier than nature trees; that is, they are more likely to survive than their unmodified counterparts. In Hawaii, for example, a new pest-resistant species of papaya trees has been developed in response to ring spot virus infections that have repeatedly damaged the native papaya tree population. Planting the genetically modified papayas has largely put an end to the ringspot problem.
Moreover, genetically modified trees promise to bring a number of economic benefits to those who grow them. Genetically modified trees tend to grow faster, give greater yields of food, fruit, or other products and be hardier. This allows tree farmer to get faster and greater returns on their farming investment and save on pesticides as well.
Finally, the use of genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. Because of the growing demand for firewood and building timber, many forests around the world are being cut down faster than they can be replaced. Introducing genetically modified trees,designed for fast growth and high yield in given geographic conditions,would satisfy the demand for wood in many of those areas and save the endangered native trees, which often include unique or rare species.
The reading and the listening are about the pros and cons of Genetically modified trees. In the reading, the writer tries to establish the point that those trees are gives lots of benefits to us, and provides three specific aspects of it. However, the professor refutes the writer's point of view and states the negatives of those trees.
First of all, the reading claims that genetically modified trees are more resistant to in extreme condition, since their genes are modified to survive in severe climate. He explains it by giving the example of papayas trees in Hawaii, which are able to survive and protect themselves from ringspot problem because they are genetically modified trees. On the other hand, the professor clarifies it by saying that even though some nature trees may not able to survive in a extreme condition, since they are large diverse they could manage to keep themselves in the earth. However, as the genetically modified trees are modified to survive in limitate condition and they are more like uniform, they will benish in other types of critical environment for which they are not modified.
Secondly, the authors avers that those who farm those trees are getting more benefits than those who just rely on naturally growing trees because genetically modified trees yield more utilities. This point is rebutted by the professor who mentions that though those trees produce more food or wood, but the farmers do not get benefit from this because they had to pay the child trees procedure every time and that is costlier than before. So, ultimately form owners don't earn more money from those trees.
Finally, the reading posits that since they grow more rapidly than natural wild trees whose are overexploited for wood, they can be replaced and save wild trees. The lecturer disagrees this idea and says that in some cases the modified trees are the main reasons for extinct of wild trees. While those trees are able to grow rapidly and use the natural resources like sunlight, wind,and spaces, the wild trees have not the ability to compete with those modified trees. so the genetically improved plants just create more extreme situation for survive wild trees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nature trees may not able to survive in a extreme condition, since they are large...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...than before. So, ultimately form owners dont earn more money from those trees. Fi...
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Line 7, column 383, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...he natural resources like sunlight, wind,and spaces, the wild trees have not the abi...
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Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...y to compete with those modified trees. so the genetically improved plants just cr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, first of all, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 366.0 270.72406181 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00273224044 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31334297819 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475409836066 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 419.366225166 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2035361223 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.785714286 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.520271871948 0.272083759551 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199057633111 0.0996497079465 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945443958453 0.0662205650399 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321893186649 0.162205337803 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906020948032 0.0443174109184 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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