TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Reading and lecture are both debating whether or not the material founded in a rex's leg bone is animal tissues. On the one hand, the writer states that it is animal tissues and provides three reasons of support. However, the lecturer cast doubts on the claims made by the writer, saying that his arguments make him be skeptical when compares them with real facts.

First, the presence of the soft flexible substance can have another explanation. When an organism dies, its hallow places such as bones are colonized by bacteria colonies. In other words, this small organism lives insides the bones and leave behind the organic material, which is as soft as the one from the bones the researcher found. Therefore, this standpoint is directly contradicted by the lecturer.

Second, there are numerous other fossils which show that primitive animals didn't have the red blood cells while they were alive. Thereby, the red blood mark must represent something else such as reddish materials. As a result, this also gainsays the passage.

Third, it is absolutely impossible to find collagen in those fossils because they are 75 million years old. The writer states that researchers found collagen over the bones, and this proves that they are dealing with animal tissues. Anyway, the speaker refutes this statement, adding that collagen can resist maximum 100 000 years, whereas the fossils are much older. In short, if this theory is authentic, everything people know about collagen is not true. One possible explanation for the presence of collagen is that this might come from the hands of people who handled the bones. Thus, the author's reason is once again dismantled by solid proof.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Reading and lecture are both debating whether or not the material founded in a rexs leg bone...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ssils which show that primitive animals didnt have the red blood cells while they wer...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, whereas, while, in short, such as, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07913669065 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37465657325 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640287769784 0.540411800872 118% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5275177424 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.25 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 7.06452816374 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332845607175 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884182954835 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569478383473 0.0662205650399 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174995936234 0.162205337803 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281091531406 0.0443174109184 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.