TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

The reading passage discusses an interesting topic about the an ancient Greek weapon called burning mirror and how it is believed to be just a myth, providing three reasons for support. However, the lecturer casts doubt on the claim made by the article. She thinks there are good evidences to believe in the existence of this weapon and refutes each of the reasons of the reading passage.

First, the article sustains that the technology was not advanced enough to build that size of mirror built with the purpose to burn a ship with the sun's rays from the distance. On the contrary, the lecturer explains how Greeks could manage to gather many small pieces of cooper mirrors and glued together over the big parabola shape surface to produce the burning effect.

Secondly, the reading passage argues that the time required to burn a ship with the burning mirror, according to experiments done, is too long: ten minutes. Challenging this point, the lecturer suggests that the preferred target to burn was not the wood of the ship but the pitch. This part of the ship could be burned in seconds.

Finally, the article argues that the burning mirror had no point to be created when Greek soldiers could use the burning arrows from same distance. The lecturer disagrees with this idea by mentions that the burning mirror's main characteristic was the surprise factor, which the arrow did not presented.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: the; an
...ge discusses an interesting topic about the an ancient Greek weapon called burning mir...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'present'
Suggestion: present
...urprise factor, which the arrow did not presented.
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1169.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 238.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91176470588 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36254417926 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4428212152 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.9 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 7.06452816374 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381585337651 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152899896961 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853075863526 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239007764019 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308061574024 0.0443174109184 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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