TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The lecture and passage both discuss the aim and meaning of carved stones. The passage claims that the purpose of these artifacts are hunting, fighting, weigh and mesure, or social purpose. In contrast, the lecture refutes this and states that these three possibility are not convincing. The professor provides three reasons to refutes each author's reasons.

The passage and lecture mainly disucss hether these carved stones were used as weapons. The reading points out that these carved stones were mainly used for hunting and fighting. The professor, however, indicates that other weapons that were used in Neolithic period have sign of wearing, but these carved stones are reamined very well. Some of these carved stones have crack on them, but they preseved very well. So this carved stones were not used as weapons.

Furthermore, lecture and reading considers whether these carved stones were used for weights and measures. The passage posits that these carved stones were used for commercial pourpose. The proffesor denies this point and explains that even though these carved stones have same size, but the have different mass. In fact, these carved stones were made from different stone with different mass. The stone have same size, but different mass. So, these stone were not used for measuring purpose.

Last but not least, the social aim of these carved stones is another theories that is considered by professor and passage. The passage indicates that these stones shown the oscial class. In contrast, the professor rejected this point by explaining that these is unlikely that these stones were used as social marker. Some of these stones are so intricated, while other are very simple. According to the professor, diead people had high ranking. But there are not any stones in tomb and grave. So these stone were not used as social marker.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that the purpose of these artifacts are hunting, fighting, weigh and mesure, or ...
^^
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ese carved stones were used as weapons. The reading points out that these carved st...
^^^
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e mainly used for hunting and fighting. The professor, however, indicates that othe...
^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'in contrast', 'in fact']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231213872832 0.261695866417 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.202312138728 0.158904122519 127% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0751445086705 0.0723426182421 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0549132947977 0.0435111971325 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00578034682081 0.0277247811725 21% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.106936416185 0.128828473217 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0924855491329 0.0370669169778 250% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.23492540555 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00578034682081 0.0208969081088 28% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0028901734104 0.00154638098197 187% => OK
Determiners: 0.130057803468 0.128158765124 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00578034682081 0.0114777025283 50% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1872.0 1645.83664459 114% => OK
No of words: 303.0 271.125827815 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17821782178 6.08160592843 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39603960396 0.374372842146 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.250825082508 0.287516216867 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158415841584 0.187439937562 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102310231023 0.113142543107 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23492540555 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422442244224 0.539623497131 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 40.6763302514 53.8517498576 76% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0529801325 169% => OK
Sentence length: 13.7727272727 21.7502111507 63% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5011854532 49.3711431718 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0909090909 132.220823453 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7727272727 21.7502111507 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.878197800319 47% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 38.8552355236 50.5018328374 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.63736263736 1.90840788429 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501033357046 0.549887131256 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151641241363 0.142949733639 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101486830743 0.0787303798458 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524577759542 0.631733273073 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122612776441 0.139662658121 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20690384142 0.266732575781 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780945797894 0.103435571967 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.422906272102 0.414875509568 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.084068115519 0.0530846634433 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37987353111 0.40443939384 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379799460848 0.0528353158467 72% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.26048565121 282% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.62251655629 193% => OK
Neutral topic words: 11.0 3.1766004415 346% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 10.2958057395 204% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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even though these carved stones have same size, but the have different mass.
Description: don't put 'even though' 'but' in one sentence.

Sentence: Last but not least, the social aim of these carved stones is another theories that is considered by professor and passage.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and theories

The passage indicates that these stones shown the oscial class.
The passage indicates that these stones show the social class.

Sentence: The passage claims that the purpose of these artifacts are hunting, fighting, weigh and mesure, or social purpose.
Error: mesure Suggestion: measure

Sentence: The passage and lecture mainly disucss hether these carved stones were used as weapons.
Error: disucss Suggestion: discuss
Error: hether Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: The professor, however, indicates that other weapons that were used in Neolithic period have sign of wearing, but these carved stones are reamined very well.
Error: reamined Suggestion: remained

Sentence: Some of these carved stones have crack on them, but they preseved very well.
Error: preseved Suggestion: preserved

Sentence: The passage posits that these carved stones were used for commercial pourpose.
Error: pourpose Suggestion: purpose

Sentence: The proffesor denies this point and explains that even though these carved stones have same size, but the have different mass. In fact, these carved stones were made from different stone with different mass. The stone have same size, but different mass. So, these stone were not used for measuring purpose.
Error: proffesor Suggestion: professor

Sentence: The passage indicates that these stones shown the oscial class.
Error: oscial Suggestion: social

Sentence: Some of these stones are so intricated, while other are very simple.
Error: intricated Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: According to the professor, diead people had high ranking.
Error: diead Suggestion: died

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2

No. of Words: 303 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 19 12
No. of Words: 303 250
No. of Characters: 1512 1200
No. of Different Words: 123 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.083 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.367 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4