TPO 34 Writing Integrated task
A huge marine mammal, known as Steller’s sea cow, once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see one. In 1768 the animal became extinct. The reasons for the extinction are not clear. Here are three theories about the main cause of extinction.
The reading discusses three theories about why Stellar's sea cow, a massive marine mammal, became extinct in 1768. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on each theory provided by the reading.
First, the author argues that the extinction of sea cows may have taken place as a result of overhunting by native people of Siberia. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that since these marine creatures are extremely weighty and large, a limited number of them were enough to supply the needs of the village's population for a couple of months. In other words, the village's population was not that large to cause much population loss of sea cows as a result of hunting.
Moreover, the reading passage holds the view that the shortage of the main source of sea cows' food, kelp, caused by ecosystem disturbances may account for their extinction. In contrast, the professor underlines the fact that if such ecosystem disturbances had occurred, their detrimental consequences would have been applied to other marine animals like whales. But, there were no reports indicating whales' population decline. Therefore, sea cows couldn't have been annihilated due to food shortage.
Finally, the reading asserts that hunting by European fur traders may have caused a large number of sea cows' death. On the contrary, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that when European traders arrived at the island, the sea cows' population had already declined. Considering the fact that their population was large hundreds of years ago, the main reason which had brought about such a dramatic decrease in their population must have happened long before Europeans arrived there. Therefore, the European traders couldn't be considered as the main reason for the sea cows' extinction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'villages'' or 'village's'?
Suggestion: villages'; village's
... were enough to supply the needs of the villages population for a couple of months. In o...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'villages'' or 'village's'?
Suggestion: villages'; village's
...a couple of months. In other words, the villages population was not that large to cause ...
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Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...population decline. Therefore, sea cows couldnt have been annihilated due to food short...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...by European fur traders may have caused a large number of sea cows death. On the contrary, the sp...
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Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
... traders arrived at the island, the sea cows population had already declined. Consid...
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Line 7, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... there. Therefore, the European traders couldnt be considered as the main reason for th...
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Line 7, column 580, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...nsidered as the main reason for the sea cows extinction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in contrast, as a result, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19587628866 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60362293718 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549828178694 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5775168975 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.307692308 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06452816374 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.558832981568 0.272083759551 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201921308911 0.0996497079465 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118998398115 0.0662205650399 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314129436492 0.162205337803 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820152184688 0.0443174109184 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.