TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The reading passage discusses an interesting topic about the possible of maintain human presence in other planet beside Earth, and sustains the impossibility to do it in Venus. The article provides extensive information and some reasons for support. However, the lecturer casts doubts on this claim, and opposes to each of the reasons provided by the reading passage.

Firs of all, the reading passage states that the high pressure of Venus'surface is so high that would crash any spacecraft that could land on the planet in hours. Thus, it would be impossible to maintain a station necessary to live in. The lecturer challenge this point by suggesting the implementation of an air station, like a balloon type structure, above in the higher levels of the atmosphere. Therefore, the pressure in these high levels would be less than on the surface, and similar as on the surface of the Earth.

Secondly, the reading passage argues that the lack of water and oxygen would be another impediment for human life on Venus. Bringing water and oxygen from Earth would be impractical and unsubstantial with the project of living in this planet. On the other hand, the lecturer explains that the elements presents in Venus' atmosphere, carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulphuric acid, could allow the production of water and oxygen necessary. Again, the reading passage fails to sustain this point after the lecture refutation.

Finally, the reading passage points out the lack of sunlight on the planet's surface because of the thick layer of clouds in the atmosphere, as another reason for why the human life would be impossible to maintain in Venus. On the opposite, the lecturer reinforces the idea of an air station above the thick layers of clouds that could obstruct the sunlight. Additionally, the clouds below reflecting the sunlight would reinforce this source of light. Consequently, the sunlight necessary to produce energy on the solar panels on the station would be enough.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13931888545 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69963004449 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489164086687 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9720322484 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379235258083 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130555413991 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801400468286 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226785568849 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737540547648 0.0443174109184 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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