TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The reading passage states that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable to maintain a human presence, whereas the professor deems that it is possible for man to live in Venus.

Firstly, the author insists that the atmosphere pressure at Venus' surface is much greater compare to earth's surface, and such a high pressure will crush everything human might land on it. The professor, however, argues that we can establish station floating in Venus' atmosphere fifteen kilometers above its surface where the pressure will be much lower than surface and will be safe to human.

Secondly, the reading says that there are no reservoirs in Venus' surface and only a small portion of oxygen and water vapor in air. And it is impractical to supply these things from earth. In contrast, the speaker reckons that Venus has many chemical compounds, such as carbon dioxide, and human can obtain oxygen and vapor water from chemical process by using these compounds.

Lastly, the reading states that only a little light from sun can reach the surface of Venus due to its thick cloud which fill the atmosphere, so it is impossible to use solar energy to generate enough power for their machines and equipment. On the contrary, the professor points out that the cloud is not very thick in station's position which is fifteen kilometers above the surface. In addition, station can use the light reflected below and above, so there are adequate energy to power machines and equipment.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, whereas, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1239.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 249.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97590361446 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46477089462 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546184738956 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.4910995545 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 7.06452816374 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419219109638 0.272083759551 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162557952099 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424096517719 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226412665229 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274520924419 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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