TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In the lecture, the professor discusses why none of the three ways mentioned in the passage on preventing birds from flying into glass are plausible.

To begin with, the reading claims that one-way glass looks opaque from the outside, so the birds will not try to fly through it. However, the speaker refutes this by saying that the reflections of the surroundings, such as sky and trees, on the outside of the glass make them no difference from transparent glass. Hence, birds can still get hurt on the glass.

Next, whilst the second method in the passage believes that decorating transparent glass with colorful patterns can remind birds, the lecturer points out that if this solution were to be effective, the open wholes on the glass have to be extremely small, diminishing the amount of light indoors. Otherwise, the birds would still try to fly through the glass where there is no colorful paintings.

Finally, though birds are capable of navigating according to the magnetic field, as the instructor states, this is only restricted to long-distance migration. On the other hand, they mainly make use of sight to locate when traveling short distances. This indicates that it is unrealistic to utilize man-made magnetic field to keep them away from city buildings, which is contradicted to the solution in the reading.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, hence, however, if, look, second, so, still, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1114.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 220.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06363636364 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66967977155 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609090909091 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6907363956 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.777777778 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5555555556 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465370357995 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184625190374 0.0996497079465 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875190325614 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25467896675 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906858531284 0.0443174109184 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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