The lecture and reading both are discussed about medical information should be stored at electronic databases rather than on paper. While reading are discussed about advantage of using electronic database and provide three advantage for support that topic. However, lecture refutes each of the reading point and talk disfavor use of electronic database.
Firstly, the reading claims it help to reduce costing of storing and transferring medical records. Furthermore it help to access all database in short time that is stored at virtually. However, the lecture refutes this point by saying that all those doctors are used electronic computerized record but they have still paper based report to them as a backup. The lecture are not think that it will going to reduce the costing.
In addition, the reading make the argument that it help to prevent medical related errors. Some doctors handwriting very poor it create error that make serious consequences. If electronic database available that help to reduce human related error. The lecture counter this point by saying that doctors still used pen and paper when they examining, Stuff of doctor are update the electronic database it possible stuff misunderstood or miss read the document.
Finally, the author states that electronic records are helpful to medical research because large amount of data available in electronic records, if researcher want data they can easly filter out needed information. The lecture refutes this point by saying that electronic database are not open for researcher and they are not willing to collect that information. Some patients are not want to disclose there medical report to all, some are only used for there medical purpose
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...oring and transferring medical records. Furthermore it help to access all database in short...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...ferring medical records. Furthermore it help to access all database in short time th...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
...o them as a backup. The lecture are not think that it will going to reduce the costin...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
... The lecture are not think that it will going to reduce the costing. In addition, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...related errors. Some doctors handwriting very poor it create error that make seri...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'creates'?
Suggestion: creates
... Some doctors handwriting very poor it create error that make serious consequences. I...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e error that make serious consequences. If electronic database available that help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, in addition, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 273.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32234432234 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57832788678 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2381258889 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.785714286 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423112698159 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144335557904 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818771702589 0.0662205650399 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263816562921 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587653403359 0.0443174109184 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.