TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The lecture apparently disproves the reading passage from various aspects. The lecurer contends that, although the three advantages of electronic medical records claimed by the passage seems acceptable, there are still uncertain in some occasions. That is to say, the claims in the passage suffer from several flaws which are presented below.

The flaw of the first claim is that the reduced costs will not be so significant even if the electronic medical records are put into use. According to the lecturer, doctors will still keep using the paper records in some emergency situations. Also, the signatures on the paper records have more legal effects than the electronic one. Therefore, doctors will still pay for storage space for paper records.

The problem of the second claim is that most doctors will still use paper records when examining patients. There will be some staffs in the hospital to help the doctors to transfer their handwriting records to electonic records. In this way, they may still make errors during the interpretion process even if they use the electronic records.

The weakness of the third claim is that the US has a strict privacy law to keep electronic medical records secret if the patients want. Accessing to these electronic medical records can be extremely hard for researchers because the process to obtain the permission is strict and complex. The patients can even block use of their electronic medical records to anyone except the hospital.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, third, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17842323651 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53851040071 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53112033195 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.639774552 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.0 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5384615385 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495603447716 0.272083759551 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186229585373 0.0996497079465 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933886068419 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301071371537 0.162205337803 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109913975614 0.0443174109184 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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