TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

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TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

The reading explains three problems related to the plan of sending humans to Mars, while the professor rejects the reading's problems and provides three solutions as follows.
Firstly, the reading claims that due to the long distance between Mars and Earth, accounting for at least two years, a plenty of food and water should be provided for astronauts, while the cargo capacity of space vehicles is limit. In contrast, the professor points out that the astronauts can use hydro plants which can be grown just in the water. Not only this plant can provide sufficient food for astronauts, but also transmit CO2 to O2 which provides astronauts with fresh air. Furthermore, the water which is used for these plants can be recycled several times and used as clean water.
Secondly, the reading claims that astronauts on the Mars are in the hazardous circumstances due to zero-gravity. While the professor reckons that several stations are developed for astronauts to have appropriate exercise in the zero-gravity. In addition, they regularly consume some nutrition foods such as vitamin to cope with the problem of bone density in zero-gravity.
Eventually, the reading claims that astronauts on Mars would be exposed to dangerous level of space radiation. Controversy, the professor affirms that they are equipped with special shielded area to safe themselves on the Mon. Moreover, all the time the radiation of sun is not dangerous.

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Average: 1.2 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, at least, in addition, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 231.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21645021645 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79328480185 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562770562771 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.940795795 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.545454545 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0624257496107 0.272083759551 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.02664258556 0.0996497079465 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0229745449507 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0405296365244 0.162205337803 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00773286211344 0.0443174109184 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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