TPO 53 : integrated writing task
The main topic of the passage and the lecture is about imposing taxes on cigarettes or unhealthy foods. The author of the passage is in favor of this approach but the lecturer takes a different view. She believes that this approach is challenging.
According to the passage, there are several benefits regarding imposing taxes on cigarettes. First of all high taxes lead people to buy fewer cigarettes hence decline the smoking habits and lead to a more healthy society. Also, this approach would be practical for unhealthy foods and beverages. Secondly, As smokers impose medical costs on government it is unfair that nonsmokers contribute equally to covering the costs, hence, high taxes would be a good source for covering medical costs. Finally, High taxes on cigarettes is a great revenue for governments which can be allocated to different projects for example building stadium or creating a public park.
While the author is in favor of imposing high taxes on cigarettes, the lecturer believes that it has some drawbacks and negative consequences. First of all, she mentions that high taxes encourage smokers to buy cheaper cigarettes which have lower quality and contain more harmful substances which cause great health problems. Also by increasing taxes on unhealthy food, people spend more money on it and spend less on healthy foods. She goes on to say that as the smokers have not equal income the imposed taxes are unfair as it has a greater burden on lower-income smokers compared to higher-income smokers. Finally, she mentions that as the high taxes on cigarettes is a great revenue for the governments which worth millions of dollars, some governments may depend on it and don't want to lose this resource. so, they are not strict enough about pursuing policies which prevent people from smoking in public or even private areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nces which cause great health problems. Also by increasing taxes on unhealthy food, ...
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Line 5, column 779, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., some governments may depend on it and dont want to lose this resource. so, they ar...
^^^^
Line 5, column 812, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...it and dont want to lose this resource. so, they are not strict enough about pursu...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 304.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08223684211 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64065662937 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1760716371 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.357142857 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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