171-Imagine you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why?
People have their own favorite accessories which they prefer to carry with themselves while traveling. For me, the most important thing is definitely my Labtop that I pick it up with myself during any long travel. My Labtop is more essential for me because I do my job with the usage it and I am entertained with.
First reason for being more important of my personal computer is that I can perform my work with it. In fact, I am dependant on my Labtop. All of my information is saved in it. So, I am sure that I will need to it when I am far from my house. I remember, when I traveled to Turkey to stay beside my twin sister for about one month, my Labtop was the first thing that I picked up with myself. I understood that it was really necessary because I could do lots of my work which were not predictable before the trip. If I didn't have my Lobtop, I should come back soon, and so my pleasure of that trip would be disrupted. In addition, the Labtop gave me the chance to connect to Internet in order to carry out some actions like chatting with my family, or contacting with everyone who was far from me on the time. From this experience, I have learned that I should carry my Labtop in all long trips, even though it might be too heavy.
Second reason that my Labtop is a must for me during every trip is that it entertains me. All the time, I am with Labtop. I not only do work with my Labtop, but also I am interested with. I can play music and games, look pictures, movies, videos, and so forth. My Labtop is like a kind friend for me and I feel alone without it. Bases on one of my experience, when I had my Labtope with myself over the trip, I could amuse myself by playing a majestic movie on the bus. I could not sleep on the bus and watching the movie caused that I didn’t feel boring while traveling. So, I am sure that if I have my labtob with myself, I won't feel homesick wherever I am.
From my view point, the most necessary one for me among all of my assets is my Labtop. I perform about all of my projects with my own computer and I am also amused and interested in the facilities that if gives me.
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Sentence: In fact, I am dependant on my Labtop.
Error: dependant Suggestion: No alternate word
labtob -> laptop
flaws:
Need to polish sentences. Most of the sentences start with the subject 'I'.
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