Television has a great role in our life. There is at least one television in every home and there are a lot of speculation about their effect in our behavior. Some scientists think that television influenced peoples behavior negatively, while others refute this. In my opinion, television and movies effect our behavior positively. It helps us to relax, improve our imagination skills and to gain knowledge. I shall explain in the following paragraphs.
First of all, watching television reduce our stress level and make us feel relax. Accordingly our relationship with our friends and families will be better while watching a good movie. A lot of people prefer to watch television after a long day because when they are watching they they forget everything about work or other stressful events and they relieved. For instance, when I come home at night I always prefer to watch The Tonight Show, which is a comedy program and I feel happier.
Another thing is watching television help us to improve our imagination skills. There are great movies which created by smart and inspirational people and when we watch movies we feel ourselves in another world and sometimes we match ourselves with the characters. So watching quality films helps us to gain imagination skill. Researches show that "emotional intelligence" is one of the most important key for a successful and a happier life. Watching movies especially important for children because, we improve our emotional intelligence mostly in our childhood times. So, watching movies and television is a great way for us to develop our imagination skill.
Television also helps us to increase our knowledge. There are great educational programs about culture, geography, sociology, psychology, wild life, etc. and television give us opportunity to extent our knowledge. For instance, there is a girl who travel all around the world and throughout her program, she share her experience with other people. By watching this program I learnt new cultures, societies, foods, great buildings.
All in all, I definitely think that if we watch television and movies in balance it will effect our behavior positively. It helps us to relax, to improve our imagination skills and to gained knowledge.
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