Studying abroad is definitely an overwhelming experience, through which I could learn a lot, starting from becoming more responsible, to learning more about other cultures as well as speaking other languages. However, I'm pretty sure that I would also confront various difficulties from this experience.
First of all, studying abroad could always allow me to become a more responsible person. There is no doubt that by leaving my country, my family and my beloved ones for the sake of studying abroad, I would need to be more on my own. I would learn to manage my budget alone, I would cook for myself when i'm hungry, I would clean my residence when it needs to, and above all that I would need to handle my problems by myself. When I'm in a foreign country, it would obviously take me some time to be able to build an intimate friendly relationships with others. Therefore, at certain circumstances, when I'd be feeling obnoxcious, furious or disappointed, I might not be able to find anybody to support me or even care for me.
Secondly, One of the best interesting things that I could experience while studying abroad is learning more about distinct cultures and customs. For example; If presumably I would get the opportunity to study in the United States, I would certainly experience celebrating the Thanks Giving holiday there, where all families and friends would be thankful and would gather around the table to enjoy eating a turkey togother. A holiday that I would really like to experience, if I would end up studying there. Nevertheless I would definitely miss celebrating Chrismas and Easter in Jerusalem (where I come from), as such holidays have different type and taste that I would never experience in any other country.
Finally, I could also benefit from learning a new language. Obviously, when I choose to study abroad, I should be having in my mind that I need to learn the language of the country,in where I'm planning to study. As much as learning a new language could be interesting, deep inside I know that it would also be challenging. Hence, I'm sure that I would be facing so many difficulties; dealing with people and expressing my feelings. However, I would ultimately get over it with time.
In conclusion, studying abroad is definitely an advantage, through which I could become more responsible, I could experience other cultures and customs. Moreover, I could learn to speak a new language. Whereas, regarding the disadvantages of such an experience, I think that I would handle them for the fact that they are permanent.
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Sentence: For example; If presumably I would get the opportunity to study in the United States, I would certainly experience celebrating the Thanks Giving holiday there, where all families and friends would be thankful and would gather around the table to enjoy eating a turkey togother.
Error: togother Suggestion: together
flaws:
1. Need to remove repetitive words
2. Need more sentence varieties. There are a lot of sentences starting with the subject "I".
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