An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument, the author concludes that Tagus government should do everything it can to support planting and promoting the new type of millet in order to address the problem of vitamin A deficiency among its citizens. To support this statement, the author points out and implies that farmers will be able to grow the millet since they will get subsidies and that Tagus people will accept this new food since it is already popular there. However, this reasoning this not convincing enough since several questions are not answered in this argument.
First of all, the author fails to consider other possible options to solve the vitamin A deficiency problem. It is possible that it saves government more time and effort to just provide citizens with vitamin A pills or import other vegetables that consist of abundant vitamin A from nearby towns. If so, the validity of the argument government should support this recommendation with full effort is by no means well established. Since other options can be much more helpful for addressing this issue.
Second, the author does not provide enough information which can show that farmers can successfully plant the new kinds of millet if they have subsidies. Is the new millet as easy to be plant as the original ones? Does farmers need special facilities or specific knowledge in order to grow the new millet? Are the subsidies enough for farmers to apply this change? If evidence can be provided that it is super easy to grow this new kind of plant and only little subsidies are enough to support farmers to apply the change, farmers may happily embrace this new millet, and thus the argument is strongly justified.
In addition, the author commits a fallacy by falsely assuming that the millet's being staple food now can lead to people's general acceptance for the new type of millet. Is the flavor of the new millets similar to old ones? Can it be stored as long as original millet? For example, if the taste of millet is terrible and it will decay after short period of time, people may not tend to adopt the new millet. In this case, the supposition is dramatically weakened.
In conclusion, although this suggestion seems appealing, it is not strongly bolstered since several critical points are still open to doubt. To better support his or her recommendation, the author should consider and rule out all other possible solutions to address the vitamin A deficiency problem. To prove that farmers are able to grow the new type of plant and that public will adopt this new food, the author needs to provide more information and and probably conduct some survey to make sure the predicted outcome is likely to appear.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A pill' or simply 'pills'?
Suggestion: A pill; Pills
...t to just provide citizens with vitamin A pills or import other vegetables that consist...
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Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[3]
Message: Did you mean 'form'?
Suggestion: form
...bles that consist of abundant vitamin A from nearby towns. If so, the validity of th...
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Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... terrible and it will decay after short period of time, people may not tend to adopt the new m...
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Line 9, column 449, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...uthor needs to provide more information and and probably conduct some survey to make su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88596491228 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52264291978 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447368421053 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3804318097 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376807401956 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128511426815 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667675145574 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225000227478 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688161973368 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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