Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the numbe

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Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.

It has been theorized that the high number of skateboarders have led to the reduction in business in Central Plaza. Also, a few observations supporting this deduction have been presented. However, there are a few shortcomings in this theory which need to be addressed.

Firstly, there is no strong correlation between the increase in skateboarders leading to decrease in shoppers. It is possible that the demographic of the population of the region has changed over the period of time. Maybe, the number of teenagers and young adults have increased. They may indulge in recreational activities such as skateboarding. Thus, no inference can be drawn in this matter.

Also, the fact that litter and vandalism is caused by skateboarders is not an entirely valid presumption. There may be altogether different causes for that. For example, ruffians and thugs can indulge in random acts of destruction. The litter is caused due to improper waste management, which has been overlooked by the survey. Thus, skateboarders cannot be held responsible for these causes.

Lastly, it is incorrect to assume that the sales of Central Plaza will return to previous levels. Conditions change with times. For instance, the quality of goods in Central Plaza is not as it used to be; the prices may have skyrocketed. The prohibition of skateboarders cannot remedy that.

Therefore, I believe that stopping skateboarders from coming at the plaza is not justified, and will not necessarily result in increase in the number of shoppers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 244.0 441.139720559 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25819672131 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09411572772 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1634975612 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.2777777778 119.503703932 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5555555556 23.324526521 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219235122271 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587243104686 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720324396395 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120617483781 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450420189374 0.0628817314937 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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