You have bought a mobile phone in a tax-free shop just a few days ago and it doesn’t work properly.Write a letter to the manager and complain about it and ask him to solve the problem.

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You have bought a mobile phone in a tax-free shop just a few days ago and it doesn’t work properly.
Write a letter to the manager and complain about it and ask him to solve the problem.

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter in regards to inferior quality of mobile phone which I have purchased before 4 days from your tax-free shop.

The first issue was, Since couple of days I am finding problem with the display quality. Every time I look at any picture or video screen looks faded and distorted. Sometimes I have also found white and black stripes horizontally covering full screen. Second issue is with the microphone, it looks faulty to me. My friends always complain of getting some high pitched noise when I talk to them. They have also added that my voice continuously cracks and they barely can understand what I am saying. Last but not least, it takes ages to completely recharge my phone, also I have observed since 4 days that battery drains out in mere 4 hours of use. I was really astonished to discover so much problem in a quite expensive cell phone model.

Either full refund or replacement of mobile phone would do the work in order to rectify the problem. I have also attached scanned copy of my purchase invoice so it would be easier for you to process my refund.

Waiting for your prompt reply with actions.

Yours Faithfully,

Mr. Patel

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...ar Manager, I am writing this letter in regards to inferior quality of mobile phone which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74519230769 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41290121445 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6875 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 303.3 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5479873557 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9230769231 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176140469793 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524585173298 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594529114173 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108658504561 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809683110532 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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