TPO_26_Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is true that a successful job requires a solid foundation on which a person can make progress. Some people are of the opinion that this implicates that children should choose their parents' careers to succeed. I, however, subscribe to the view that people do not necessarily have to choose jobs similar to their parents' to secure their future's success.
First of all, In today's world, people choose a career based on their interests which does not necessarily have to be what their parents have done. The governing meritocracy can guarantee that they can make progress if they are really committed to their jobs. Albert Einstein is a good example to this; his father wanted him to continue the family's business. He, however, refused to do so and studied physics - the major he was interested in. Einstein is not the only example. I know numerous people who have had illiterate parrent, but still acquired highest positions and most decent occupations. This illustrates that choosing jobs similar to parent's is not a primary factor in success.
Moreover, I believe that people should better not be supported by their parents in their jobs; this way they will become more independent. In the beginning of a career people may find obstacles that seem insurmountable, but as time goes by, they will learn how to tackle those problems. This way, they can gain the ability to think critically and devise new ways of addressing problems. In the way of solving problems, they learn many things that can, in turn, make them more mature and more successful. Whereas, choosing a job related to their parents', children would never have this opportunity and will, under the best circumstances, become mediocre workers.
In conclusion, I believe that in seeking for a solid ground for their future career, children should do their best in any major they decide to study if they want to be successful. Confining them to choose a career similar to their parents' is not the best choice, and sometimes, does more harm than good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'acquired the highest'.
Suggestion: acquired the highest
... have had illiterate parrent, but still acquired highest positions and most decent occupations. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, whereas, in conclusion, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94411764706 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61632558569 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538235294118 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8821950959 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8823529412 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261778951937 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942826553107 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946335925712 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19233477674 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728980652276 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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