Money is a necessary thing for education. Some students have to work during studying to have enough budget to pay for a university. Some people think that these students should not find a part-time job when they are in the university, while others believe that this will have more benefits for the students. Students should get a fund from other methods because they do not have time to focus on their majors, and they might be too fatigued to study in classes.
Students cannot focus on their studies when they need to work. They have to spend their time with work, so they cannot do their best in a university. Without any jobs, they have only one thing to concentrate on. This will be better for these students because they do not have to worry about their work; therefore, their grades might increase due to having more time to practice. For example, a student who has a part-time job as a waiter. The student has to spend his time at least 8 hours a day on weekends. It is obvious that he almost does not have time to practice or do his homework; consequently, they will not have as understanding in subjects as his friends who do not have a job. This might not affect anything during the semester, but in the exam period, he cannot read a book as much as he wants to. Therefore, his grade might be lower than it should be, and these grades will affect his job in the future. Paying tuition fees by themselves can be negative effects on students.
Additionally, fatigue and stress from working can affect studying in classes. If the students have to work every day, they will not have time to rest, which will affect their bodies some days. Programmers are an example of the jobs that can show the effect of not enough rest. Many programmers spend their time coding a program, which might take a lot of time each day. It is clear that humans cannot maintain their best working performance when they have to do something for a long time. These programmers cannot avoid this fact. They will get fatigued and stressed from their work, and then they will be confused with their codes since their brains are not running. They have to take a rest to recover their mind. Also, it might affect their health unless they stop these habits. These can happen in the students who have to work. Thus, students should not work to avoid bad effects.
Students should not pay for their education from part-time work. There will be several disadvantages if the students have to work and study at the same time. Not only can their work affect the students' grades, but it also is the cause of fatigue and stress that can affect the student's health. If they get a fund from parents or universities, these will be better from the future of students.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... fatigue and stress that can affect the students health. If they get a fund from parents...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 33.0 12.4196629213 266% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56186612576 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31957704971 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409736308316 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8503442965 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5517241379 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13793103448 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487687614904 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156817097397 0.0831039109588 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12040111424 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365563917613 0.150359130593 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103742954472 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.1392134831 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... fatigue and stress that can affect the students health. If they get a fund from parents...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 33.0 12.4196629213 266% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56186612576 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31957704971 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409736308316 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8503442965 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5517241379 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13793103448 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487687614904 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156817097397 0.0831039109588 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12040111424 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365563917613 0.150359130593 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103742954472 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.1392134831 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.