The social status of women at present is totally different from that in past years as the number of women going out for work is increasingly rising. At the same time, work freedom gives rise to a problem that women do not have enough time to take care of their children. In order to resolve this situation, the government should be responsible for funding them and offering free staff and facilities to look after their children.
Women are required to do many jobs due to their gentle, carefulness energy on work and make contributions to society. In return, government have responsibility to take care of their children.
In addition, women are weak group in the society. Take single mother as an example, they have to go out for work to make a living to raise their children. Without government help and support, it is quite tough to raise a baby to a grow-up.
Also, with the help and support of government, women can concentrate on their work. They will not worry about their children leaning bad as good education and supervision will be offered by government. Meanwhile, women are more relax and can enjoy their life.
In conclusion, it is government that should subsidize women and offer free staff to care for children, thus women could reduce more burdens and do the job well, which is beneficial for not only women themselves but also children.
Sentence: In addition, women are weak group in the society.
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Sentence: Meanwhile, women are more relax and can enjoy their life.
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Sentence: Also, with the help and support of government, women can concentrateon their work.
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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 234 350
No. of Characters: 1092 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.911 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.667 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.251 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5