The diagrams below show how the sites of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show how the sites of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

There are two pictures those represent the school site in 2004 and the plan for changes in 2024.

As the number of students increase from 600 in 2004 to 1000 in 2024, the demand of new school building is an obligatory. In 2004, there were two school buildings, one was located in northern field between the car park and sports field. While the second school building right at the centre separated by the path. The east-side and south-side were a green area.

There will be as significance changes in 2024. The sport field will be replaced by the new school building. This will be build along with the second car park on the east-side. Sports field will move on the south-side of car park 2. There is also a bridge to connect between the first school building and the second school building, as the path between three school buildings.

In conclusion, there is a significant change of the number of students, as the result, the new building will be established together with new facilities.

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There are two pictures those represent the school site
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