The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams show the differences of school future site between 2004 and 2024.

In 2004, the students were about 600, and school had two main buildings, which has a sport field. The school at this time has a largely free-land with a main road and parking car by the main entrance in left side.

However, the new plan site for 2024 has set for 1000 a hundred students with three main school buildings. The new site shows some new appearances that will be changed by school. Especially, the using of the free-land which will be built for school building¬¬¬-3 fulfills the capability of students. There will create ones more subway as the main way to get car park-2 in front of sport field and beside the building-3. As the result, the sport field has cut a half from the beginning.

All in all, the new school provides to have more students. It means this improvement has succeeded the development program to teach more than student year-by-year. Based on the increase of the number of students, school has a capable chance to enlarge for the following years, because the school still has very large land to expand the classes.

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