The internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
It is an obvious fact that internet nowadays becomes one of important part in human life. Many activities are encourage internet as a solution for solving a lot of problems. As the matter of fact internet really provide big advantages than it drawback it self. There are several dominant advantages when internet used as a source of information.
Firstly, internet is the biggest media information for solving problem about information and data. People now may consider that with internet there would be no barrier anymore upon distance. There are many applications are spread on the web which containing different facilities.
Secondly, internet are very important to support all kind of jobs. As we can see recently every entry data about civilization, id and passport all must connected online. The data include our personal data, job until finger print. When connected in internet it is very simple if the the government want to check our data to make sure that it was true; no matter how far are you.
However despite many advantages, the disadvantages are exteremly big if the government not guard it with a new technology barrier; to prevent hackers using other person data for the crimes. For example; stealing with using other person credit card data. Cheating and what most dangerous are murderer.
In conclusion the internet are very important when used as a source of information; and the internet must protect with very high anti virus and spy. The solution for smart life already ready now, and internet is the answer for all those dreams.
Sentence: There are many applications are spread on the web which containing different facilities.
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Sentence: As we can see recently every entry data about civilization, id and passport all must connected online.
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Sentence: When connected in internet it is very simple if the the government want to check our data to make sure that it was true; no matter how far are you.
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