It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music,and other are not.however,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good person or musician...
discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Performing in some field with excellence without much of training and exhibiting innate talent is what we call as inborn talent or god gifted talent.And i strongly agree that if given proper training children s can become a good sports person or musician without the inborn talent.
Even though there are lots of popular and good musicians and sport person because of their innate talent for such things,But if given proper training;education;anf facility during their childhood any child can be moulted into a very popular sport men or musician keeping in mind of their interest.As saying goes"NOTHING IS IMPOSSIBLE"if we have will power and interest anything can achieved with hard work irrespective of inborn talents.
for example there are many famous personality who gain name and fame not just because of their inborn talent but because of their hard work,enthusiasm and strong will power Although there are some people who belief that one cannot become good and famous at particular field like sports and music unless they have the innate talent,but from my point of view though talent is one major factor in learning skills,hardworking and interest are also a big contributing factors in turning a child into a good sport person and musician.It is true that if we notice and understand our talent and use it in correct way no one can stop us from being successful.
On the other hand is HARD WORKING as we all know is a key to success.Despite inborn talent we can become famous and good at particular field if we work hard and if children are given proper education and training towards their field of interest.
In conclusion,i belief that both talents and hardworking is important to become good at particular field.And any child can become sport person and musician if the child is interested and taught well.
Sentence: As saying goes 'NOTHING IS IMPOSSIBLE'if we have will power and interest anything can achieved with hard work irrespective of inborn talents.
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Sentence: for example there are many famous personality who gain name and fame not just because of their inborn talent but because of their hard work, enthusiasm and strong will power Although there are some people who belief that one cannot become good and famous at particular field like sports and music unless they have the innate talent, but from my point of view though talent is one major factor in learning skills, hardworking and interest are also a big contributing factors in turning a child into a
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Sentence: Even though there are lots of popular and good musicians and sport person because of their innate talent for such things, But if given proper training; education; anf facility during their childhood any child can be moulted into a very popular sport men or musician keeping in mind of their interest.
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