Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship that people make ?
Has this been a positive or negative development ?
By the development of technology our modern life changing so quickly, also technology has been influenced to our relationship for years. And I suppose that development has more advantages than disadvantages.
Technology support our life from many ways, such as technology help us work more efficient, better communication, and receiving information from internet. As well as the great invent like internet create more opportunities to get information or communicate with people. It is popular now to use internet , because everything connected with internet ( e.g. finance, work, shopping, and relationship). Internet provide so many type of web pages like social web-pages, e-mail, entertainment , etc. It`s common now to use social pages like Facebook or Twitter between college students, and most of them try to find or develop relationship using this Internet technology . As result people get more benefit information from internet technology, which brings more positive connections between communities .
Even so, allowing people to use the social web-sites and communication tool often create problems such us time-consuming, hacking from internet your personal information and cheating someone by fake relationship . The most serious one that people, especially students and adults spend all of their study and working time for socializing on internet. And even when students attends the classes, they often been disturbing be social mobile programs, which create negative effect on study. Further the unsecure personal information on internet can be hacked by hackers, in term of sell or control your bank account, e-mails etc. Personally I had situation when my friend asked me from Messenger(MSN) to lend him money and transfer money to him, firstly I trusted because it was his MSN account, but when I checked his bank account it was not him . In my opinion the benefit from modern technology are more than negative sides. As a result we can easily get to know about somebody, for instance we don't need to go outside and meet, or spend time and money for meetings. We just can use Skype or another programs to keep on touch with friend and family members.
In general, technology affected to our relationship from positive sides, which create unlimited opportunity to find or keep on touch with persons you interested.
Sentence: By the development of technology our modern life changing so quickly, also technology has been influenced to our relationship for years.
Suggestion: By the development of technology, our modern life is changing so quickly, also technology has influenced our relationship for years.
Sentence: Technology support our life from many ways, such as technology help us work more efficient, better communication, and receiving information from internet.
Description: The fragment Technology support our is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace support with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment technology help us is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace help with verb, past tense
Sentence: Internet provide so many type of web pages like social web-pages, e-mail, entertainment , etc. Its common now to use social pages like Facebook or Twitter between college students, and most of them try to find or develop relationship using this Internet technology .
Description: The fragment Internet provide so is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense
Sentence: And even when students attends the classes, they often been disturbing be social mobile programs, which create negative effect on study.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb 'to be', infinitive or imperative
Suggestion: Refer to disturbing and be
Sentence: We just can use Skype or another programs to keep on touch with friend and family members.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and programs
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
The third paragraph is not organized well. You may separate it to two paragraphs.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.202 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.866 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.691 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.202 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5