People nowdays work hard to buy more things. This has made our live generally more confortable but many traditional value and costums have been lost and this pity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over five years ago, people have new attitude are diligent work to buy something. Here Indonesia, most of the people can buy anything even though, the things not enough important. Obviously, this is have effect for people especially people become wasteful and decline value of tradition. Although there are many advantages from habitual buy something. I believe that activity buy something can influence people too leaves local tradition. In this essay I will examine the several issues.
Firstly, activity hard work is good to make development level of wealth people however, mental hard work without balance with mental thrifty, it will useless. Society are live in big cities always interest with new product. This is happen because many malls and store that sale various kinds goods. If people not have control for them selves, it is would influence people to still spends money and buy something.
Secondly, people usually not wise when buy something. Mostly are their buy something goods which too to. Culture consumptive would encourage people difficult avoid shopping activity. On the other hand, if often we spends money to buy something which not important also made cash flow and financial themselves not health.
finally, attitude to buy something actually worst for money, however require aware for people to slowly reduce activity shopping. Saving money become one of solutions to avoid wasteful. Culture thrifty and wise in spend money will help to be prosperous live.
In conclusion, if we not aware and always spend money to get something that not important, it will make we to be wasteful. We should diligent to hard work and clever to saving money to live wealth.
Sentence: Obviously, this is have effect for people especially people become wasteful and decline value of tradition.
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Sentence: Although there are many advantages from habitual buy something.
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Sentence: I believe that activity buy something can influence people too leaves local tradition.
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Sentence: Firstly, activity hard work is good to make development level of wealth people however, mental hard work without balance with mental thrifty, it will useless.
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Suggestion: Refer to activity and hard
Sentence: This is happen because many malls and store that sale various kinds goods.
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Sentence: Mostly are their buy something goods which too to.
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Sentence: Culture consumptive would encourage people difficult avoid shopping activity.
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Suggestion: Refer to Culture and consumptive
Sentence: On the other hand, if often we spends money to buy something which not important also made cash flow and financial themselves not health.
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Suggestion: Refer to we and spends
Sentence: Saving money become one of solutions to avoid wasteful.
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