You are hereThe problem of obesity is becoming a serious issue all over the world. Some people argue that the price of fatting foods should be increased to reduce the growth of this problem.Do you agree or disagree.

The problem of obesity is becoming a serious issue all over the world. Some people argue that the price of fatting foods should be increased to reduce the growth of this problem.Do you agree or disagree.


Jasmeetgill's picture

By Jasmeetgill - Posted on 24 August 2013

Essay topic: 

The problem of obesity is becoming a serious issue all over the world. Some people argue that the price of fatting foods should be increased to reduce the growth of this problem.
Do you agree or disagree.

In this modern era the problem of obesity upsurges day by day. It goes without saying, "Health is wealth",consequently the diseases and disorders due to high obesity and keep mounting everywhere inspite of that overweight people can seen anywhere. A majority of people accord that, if the price of fast food should be escalated, it could be a lucrative panacea to address this hazard. However ,l would probably oppose to this idea.

There are ample number of reasons, firstly the life style of people has improved by leaps and bounds due to which they have forced to sit in front of computers throughout the day so they have no time to prepare food in their homes therefore, increased price would not affected them. Secondly ,irregular working system is a another contributing factor so working prolonged time due to the race of touching zenith as a result in eating and digestion related problems. These factors lead to rise in weight.

Moreover, prices of all commodities are continously rising yet their consumption has not been curtailed. For instance, according to a survey, times magazines has depicted that consumption of fast food containing higher fats is more in affulent classes who are not going to be affected by an increment in the cost of these foods as comparing to poorer people.

On the flip side, some proportion of folk have conflicting view, first and foremost by in price of fast food people divert to the green products like vegetables and fruits. Moreover, if the rates of fast food grows up people definately will give a second thought before buying any sort of fast food.

Finally, it conclude that escalating the price of fast food is not a way to curb this problem even buy as same like today yet it will not affecting the life and food choice of people respectively.

Average: 5.8 (4 votes)
Tags
More essays by this user:
Looking for speaking partner/tutor/chat? Join the instant conversation now!
    
Something about you
Choose a nickname and enter at least one ID (Skype, MSN, QQ, ICQ or Yahoo) if you want to be listed!
Registered users only
Loading...
(117 users watching; 1 users on the list)
People online
Nickname Sex L Country Favorite topics Contact

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Amandeep Singh
Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive.To what extend do you agree with this statement? subodh860
In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small com fikri
The information shows the ratio of dissimilar categories of families living in deprivation in Australia in 2000Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.• You should write at least 150 words.• You should spend about 20 minu Hera Bugis Indina
You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to Mrs. Keller describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job. Advertisement: Housekeeper required for private home. Experience is necessary. Contact Mrs. D. marzieh
Some people argue that companies and private individuals, not governments, should pay the bill of pollution clean-up. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ridaakzar
With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing ofthe past.To what extent do you agree or disagree?You should write at least 250 words. Umb221
Today's children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ngoctram0703
The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in differnt countries in 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisos where relevant. bamsifiore
The two pie charts show the petterns of expenditure in the US between 1966 - 1996. Gagandeep kour

Term
Many people spend a lot of time using communication technologies. What are the reasons for this? What effects will this haveon our family and friends? Miachel sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Many university students live with their families while others need to live away from home because their universities are in different cities. What are the advantagesand disadvantages in both situations? Miachel sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays? lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people have great ambitions in life, others don’t. Do you think ambition is important to succeed in life? Is it a positive or a negative quality to have? Justin IELTS Writing Task II
Some people believe that television programmes are of no real value for children.How far do you agree or disagree? eddysuaib IELTS Writing Task II
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990's Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make dhruv546 IELTS Writing Task I
Some people think that students, in or outside the school, should be prepared for the competitions. Others think competition is not good for children.Discuss both views and give your opinion muthup sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
trunk roads and daily commuting times. eddysuaib sticky icon IELTS Writing Task I
Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss. Justin sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
When choosing a job, the salary is the most-important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree. lrana32 IELTS Writing Task II

Some people think that students, in or outside the school, should be prepared for the competitions. Others think competition is not good for children.Discuss both views and give your opinion muthup sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
trunk roads and daily commuting times. eddysuaib sticky icon IELTS Writing Task I
Many university students live with their families while others need to live away from home because their universities are in different cities. What are the advantagesand disadvantages in both situations? Miachel sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss. Justin sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. sukriti04 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task I
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays? lrana32 sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Many people spend a lot of time using communication technologies. What are the reasons for this? What effects will this haveon our family and friends? Miachel sticky icon IELTS Writing Task II
Some people believe that television programmes are of no real value for children.How far do you agree or disagree? eddysuaib IELTS Writing Task II
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? waleed1 IELTS Writing Task II
The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words. drjowelynt IELTS Writing Task I
essayE-rater's picture

Sentence: It goes without saying, 'Health is wealth',consequently the diseases and disorders due to high obesity and keep mounting everywhere inspite of that overweight people can seen anywhere.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and seen

Sentence: There are ample number of reasons, firstly the life style of people has improved by leaps and bounds due to which they have forced to sit in front of computers throughout the day so they have no time to prepare food in their homes therefore, increased price would not affected them.
Description: The fragment not affected them is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace affected with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive

Sentence: Secondly ,irregular working system is a another contributing factor so working prolonged time due to the race of touching zenith as a result in eating and digestion related problems.
Description: The fragment , irregular working is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace irregular with adverb
Description: The token a is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, singular
Suggestion: Refer to a and another

Sentence: Finally, it conclude that escalating the price of fast food is not a way to curb this problem even buy as same like today yet it will not affecting the life and food choice of people respectively.
Description: The fragment it conclude that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace conclude with verb, past tense

Sentence: Moreover, prices of all commodities are continously rising yet their consumption has not been curtailed.
Error: continously Suggestion: continuously

Sentence: For instance, according to a survey, times magazines has depicted that consumption of fast food containing higher fats is more in affulent classes who are not going to be affected by an increment in the cost of these foods as comparing to poorer people.
Error: affulent Suggestion: affluent

Sentence: Moreover, if the rates of fast food grows up people definately will give a second thought before buying any sort of fast food.
Error: definately Suggestion: definitely

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2

Read a good grammar book.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1455 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.709 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.261 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5