Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In this modern, the competition is challenge to get awards. Sometimes, competition gives opportunities to encourage entirely talents. Yet the children are begin contest. A lot of people consider that youngsters are qualified to organize instead of vie mature.
In general, the topics are become pros and contrast in publics. An adult believes if kid grows with admire participate contest. That is benefit, in fact broods get new experience because variety performs in here like singing, dancing, painting and so on. Another benefits are build confidence, abilities, and set-up since child.
However, contrast group thinks about creating discrimination for their children. For the reason that a child is left-over time of play and grow. While I argue with child who should learn to compete. This essay can describe about it.
Firstly, the brood who healthy, grows and learn to manage emotion and reaction as soon as participate competition. Perhaps their parent wishes who find wealthy from children abilities in contest!
For example, ‘idola cilik’ contest is competition of gorgeous sounds singing and correct of vibration. This media mass programs in television channel, began at 3 – 10 age participate in ‘idola cilik’ contest.
Secondly, the children develop their confidence who improve skill and reduce of nervous in front of publics. Many excellent teenagers become from babies. So, they learn for academicals and abilities faster than what they learn at school. If they have experiment like study abroad, it is one of the greatest prestige, and win the competition.
In conclusion, a young person is happily with their aptitudes and absorb to achieve their enthusiasm and response. I think the benefits are more than backwards about children’s learning. They are learn to play and work together.
Yet the children are begin contest.
Yet the children are beginning the contest.
In this modern, the competition is challenge to get awards.
In this modern time, the competition is challenging to get awards.
Sentence: An adult believes if kid grows with admire participate contest.
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Sentence: Another benefits are build confidence, abilities, and set-up since child.
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Suggestion: Refer to Another and benefits
Sentence: Firstly, the brood who healthy, grows and learn to manage emotion and reaction as soon as participate competition.
Description: The fragment who healthy , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace healthy with adverb
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Suggestion: Refer to who and healthy
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Suggestion: Refer to as and participate
Sentence: Perhaps their parent wishes who find wealthy from children abilities in contest
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and abilities
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