Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the table below.
The table gives information about how many hours age groups of peole spend their leisure time in a year in Someland.
For watching TV or videos, teenagers and elderly, who are more than 70-years old, spend their time a lot for this activity, 1200 hours for teenagers and 1100 hours for elderly in a year. It perhaps most kind of shows in TV offer teenager program while for the elderly, there is no phisical activity that can they do well and watching movie does not require more energy to do it. In contrast, thirty and forty years old societies have the fewest time for this pleasure activity, 400 hours and 500 hours a year, because they might so busy with their job.
In socialising with the other people, people who are more than 30 years old spend more time, more than 200 hours, to communicate with small group people (less than 4 people) while group of peole who are less than 30 years old just spend 150 hours in a year. In contrary, people who are less than thirty years old socialize well in a big group people. They spend more 200 hours than in small group while the older groups just spend their time in socialising with more 4 people less than 50 hours.
In doing exercise, middle age group, 30s and 40s, like doing individual exercise while older group, 50 s and 75s, only have few time for this activity (200 hours VS 50-75 hours). Interestingly, the oldest group spend the same time with teenager for individual exercise. But for group sport, no one older group, 60s and 70s, do it. In contrast, teenagers spend a lot of times, 450 hours, for doing the activities. Also, teenager spend 100 hours in a years for going to cinema. This hours are the highest among the other people group.
Overall, teenagers spend pleasure time in the highest hours than the other group.
Sentence: Also, teenager spend 100 hours in a years for going to cinema.
Description: The fragment teenager spend 100 is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace spend with verb, past tense
Sentence: This hours are the highest among the other people group.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to This and hours
Sentence: The table gives information about how many hours age groups of peole spend their leisure time in a year in Someland.
Error: peole Suggestion: people
Sentence: It perhaps most kind of shows in TV offer teenager program while for the elderly, there is no phisical activity that can they do well and watching movie does not require more energy to do it.
Error: phisical Suggestion: physical
Sentence: In socialising with the other people, people who are more than 30 years old spend more time, more than 200 hours, to communicate with small group people less than 4 people while group of peole who are less than 30 years old just spend 150 hours in a year.
Error: socialising Suggestion: socializing
Error: peole Suggestion: people
Sentence: They spend more 200 hours than in small group while the older groups just spend their time in socialising with more 4 people less than 50 hours.
Error: socialising Suggestion: socializing
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