It is widely believed that the ability to play musical instruments is equally significant as reading and writing skills. I completely disagree with the statement with the reasons explained below.
First of all, the idea that possessing an ability to play musical tools, such as guitar is equally important as the ability to read and write is unacceptable because this skill does not influence the future learning process of the children. Children who do not have the ability to play musical instruments are still having a good opportunity to experience a better learning process when they attend schools or universities since they have mastered the most basic skills required in the learning process. Thus, to say that mastering music instruments is equally important to reading and writing skills is a false claim as it does not pose any significance for students' learning experience.
Secondly, an opportunity to learn how to play musical instruments, such as violin may not be had by everyone. To attend music schools, parents have to pay a great amount of money because the tuition fees of these schools are really expensive and this makes the schools unaffordable for many families. In Indonesia, for instance, only a small minority of families are able to send their children to music schools and generally, they come from wealthy families. Therefore, saying that this skill as compulsory as writing and reading skills for children is not unacceptable.
To sum up, I firmly believe that an ability to play musical tools should not be a must for children as for reading and writing skills. This skill does not have any significance for the children' future and to gain musical skill also requires a lot of financial support.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 678, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to experience'
Suggestion: to experience
... any significance for students learning experience. Secondly, an opportunity to learn ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76191022224 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496503496503 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.188033198 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380529768335 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161489844534 0.084324248473 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877630313737 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258081398004 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05475406647 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 678, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to experience'
Suggestion: to experience
... any significance for students learning experience. Secondly, an opportunity to learn ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76191022224 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496503496503 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.188033198 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380529768335 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161489844534 0.084324248473 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877630313737 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258081398004 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05475406647 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.