In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

Many people believe it is better to encourage children to work hard in order to achieve their goals. This statement has benefits that overweight the drawbacks.
On the one hand, Youth who works hard are devoted and focused on their target. Furthermore, they are result oriented and use the different strategy no matter how many times they fail. In addition, they have a bird eye view to reach the destination. For example, children who want to become a doctor in future work hard from his school life to get good marks.In addition, he expects the challenge nor run far away from it. Though he is unprivileged, he uses different tips and tricks to get the scholarship.
On the other hand, as every coin has its two sides it has some drawbacks too. The children who are under pressure of aiming high are sometimes anti-social, furthermore, they are isolated. Some youth even don’t have the capacity to do extremely hard work as per parents' expectations, as a result they become frustrated and even commit suicide. For example, in some dance champion shows the little children are pressurized to win the trophy but the reality is only one is the winner, and the rest are considered as a looser. As a consequence, this has a long-lasting physiological effect on their mind which may eventually destroy his whole life.
In conclusion, It is better to have a dream and work hard to achieve it but it is equally important to balance the other side of life too.

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Average: 6.3 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... from his school life to get good marks.In addition, he expects the challenge nor ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1207.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75196850394 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72864185832 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55905511811 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5948459017 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8461538462 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209402914671 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069753115321 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408584568887 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123422740298 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416268859852 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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