In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

Many people believe it is better to encourage children to work hard to achieve their goals. This statement has benefits that overweight the drawbacks.
On the one hand, Youth who work hard are devoted and focused on their target. Furthermore, they are result oriented and use the different strategy no matter how many times they fail. Besides, they have a bird's eye view in reaching the destination. For example, children who want to become a doctor in future work hard from his school life to get good marks. Also, he expects the challenge nor runs far away from it. Though he is unprivileged, he uses different tips and tricks to get the scholarship.
On the other hand, as every coin has its two sides it has some drawbacks too. The children who are under pressure of aiming high are sometimes anti-social. Furthermore, they are isolated. Some youth even don’t have the capacity to do extremely hard work as per parent's expectations as a result, they become frustrated and even commit suicide. For example, in some dance champion shows little children are pressurized to win the trophy but the reality is only one is the winner, and the rest are considered as a looser. As a consequence, this has a long-lasting physiological effect on their mind which may eventually destroy his whole life.
In conclusion, It is better to have a dream and work hard to achieve it but it is equally important to balance the other side of life too.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d from his school life to get good marks . Also, he expects the challenge nor runs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1190.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71260620235 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2355274 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3333333333 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210126197361 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067250787505 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428408060839 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125191065012 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422571555155 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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