There are many people believe that a good way to improve social well-being is to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor. While I think the point of view holds a ground, I presume that other factors might affect the state of being happy as well.
On the one hand, a society which is in favor of the people in disadvantaged situations can help improve the happiness of all the social dwellers. If people were given fair educational opportunities, our society would benefit from a higher level of educated workforce. Therefore, the intelligence and the creativity of those workers cultivated and developed under the healthy public education allocation scheme are the driven force for a national long-term development. When it comes to public healthcare system, for example, the more people can be absorbed and secured by an all-round social welfare, the better sanitary performance could be achieved. In addition, each member of a society is more likely to behave positively and be happier.
On the other hand, even though the measures made inclining to the poor are playing vital roles in an overall pleasure, the willingness pursuing of happiness can’t not be treated as irrelevant. Firstly, no matter how much encouragement being given and resources being invested, there is no doubt what truly trigger the motivation is derived from one’s longing for a better quality of life. It would be merely a huge waste of our precious funds. if a person had no desire to do his utmost to achieve his potential. By contrast, a great deal of accomplishments could be completed by productive social members with maximizing the same public support. Hence, the talent and the diligent deserve to be prioritized to make more contributions to our societies.
In conclusion, although it is true that more happiness would be provided to our society, if the disadvantaged could be lifted up from the poverty, I believe that the effort made personally also count much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: TO_TOO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ood way to improve social well-being is to narrow the gap between the rich and the...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ely a huge waste of our precious funds. if a person had no desire to do his utmost...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ely a huge waste of our precious funds. if a person had no desire to do his utmost...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0736196319 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.896946547 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588957055215 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1017269741 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.142857143 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0731407770605 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295557705621 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036950570877 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490975486382 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288296645409 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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