Some people believe that the government should not spend money on international aid when they have their own disadvantaged people like the homeless and unemployed To what extent do you agree or disagree

A highly controversial issue today relates to the opinion that money should be spent on international funds by the government while those netizens still face poor conditions in life. I partially agree with the view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people might believe that raising money for foreign aid is not necessary. On our planet, not all countries have a large budget to contribute international funds which is the reason why those netizens should be a preference by the government. Moreover, instead of spending money on that funds, the government might use the money to promote the economy of their country and their netizens will have a stable living standard. For instance, the government could open more companies for the unemployed and homeless to have an income and they should create more scholarships for poor children to motivate them to continue their step on education.
On the other hand, some argue that donating money to low-economic countries is a huge step in relationships and creates a strong bond between nations. To be more specific, developed countries will decrease tax barriers which help domestic companies have a chance to penetrate new markets overseas. Besides that, when a country is facing difficulties, other countries are always ready for help from those. For example, during the covid-19 pandemic, the USA provided a huge vaccine Moderna and Pfizer for Viet Nam while Viet Nam is trying to fight the pandemic in a disabled way. In addition, A brother country of Viet Nam - is Cambodia where Viet Nam constructed a national building as a present to express international relations between the two countries.
In conclusion, I believe that countries should donate money for foreign assistance to connect other nations together to have a peaceful earth.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15409836066 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8366314266 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.703259816 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206775632712 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746684425233 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576828768361 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126065643602 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827356869344 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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