Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be beneficial for both the
individual and society as a whole. However, I do not agree that we should therefore force all
teenagers to do unpaid work.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time. School is just as demanding as a full-time
job, and teachers expect their students to do homework and exam revision on top of attending
lessons every day. When young people do have some free time, we should encourage them to
enjoy it with their friends or to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them when they finish their studies.
At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging young people
to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair society
to force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing this can only lead to
resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being used, and parents, who
would not want to be told how to raise their children. Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer,
and this is surely the best system.
In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others, but in my opinion we
should not make this compulsory.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...this can only be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. Howev...
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...agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work. Most you...
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...hool is just as demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect their students ...
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...rk and exam revision on top of attending lessons every day. When young people do ...
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...e free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend ...
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...thing to gain from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argu...
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...st the values of a free and fair society to force a group of people to do somethi...
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... their will. Doing this can only lead to resentment amongst young people, who wou...
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...t they were being used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise t...
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...urrently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best system. I...
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...ee and help others, but in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1170.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69879518072 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33472575255 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574297188755 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9557680024 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.363636364 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.38176352705 342% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471349235263 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170129953814 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076850932435 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156209486835 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828352352778 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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