A successful person is one who earns a lot of money To what extent do you agree or disagree

In 21st century, people giving more importance to money than ever before. Some people says successful people are those, who have enormous money with them. While others oppose this idea and says success should not measure by the money one accumulates, rather its measured by several other important things. I too support the latter view.

The people who supports the latter view put forward some reasons to justify their stand. First of all, financial stability has a pivotal role in leading a happy family life. In current scenario, everything is costly related to family such as education of children, treatment for diseases. Parents cannot give their children good education and health care facilities unless they are rich. For example, in my native place, most of the parents who are immensely rich sending their children to private schools in order to acquire better education .
On the other hand, the above mentioned argument can be conquered by the following reasons. Firstly, the rich people are not the happiest one always. There are many rich people in the world could not find joy in their life because of the family problems and broken relationships. Secondly, by doing noble works to others many people achieve self satisfaction and meaning in life, which cannot achieve with money. For instance, doctors and nurses find lot of happiness in their profession by helping and caring others,however their monthly income is comparatively very low comparing to people in business. Moreover, artists who work in cine field and music directors feel in cloud nine when their products received by the people with great joy
To conclude, I strongly believe, being rich is not the key element to success,rather other significant things in life can contribute more happiness to individuals in life.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17465753425 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60288083531 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626712328767 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.085448109 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.733333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10976755181 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366531920714 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379854937475 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0665547325898 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439003813527 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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