Being successful in a job may depend on several factors. People often debate whether success has to do anything with relation to other people or rely on one's prior studies. In my opinion, one's relationship with other persons contributes to success due to satisfying people and being favorable to them.
Firstly, if somebody can satisfy others, it is more likely to succeed. If someone can relate enough to other people and empathize with them, they will feel better about him or her, leading to higher self-confidence and self-esteem, which may be the most significant success factor. For example, if a salesperson talks to their customers about their daily problem, helps them overcome it, or even only lets them talk about it, they will trust in the salesperson. When others trust somebody, it makes them succeed due to the rise in their self-confidence.
In addition to the above statements, being other people's favorite person is another reason for success. When one could relate well to others with a positive attitude, and show some care for them and their needs, he or she will be loved by others. Thus, again, it will lead to higher confidence and, eventually, success. For example, my uncle, a frowny man who does not talk much to people, even to his friends, owns a store. Not only nobody buys anything from that shop, but also they do not stop and say hi. That is because he devoids building a healthy relationship with people, so he cannot sell any goods and is not admired.
To sum it up, with all this taken into account, I believe that the ability to relate well to others has a crucial role in one's thrive; because everybody likes this personality and is fulfilling to them. So, try to escalate your ability of communication, if you want to flourish in your future job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, well, as to, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77096774194 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63345363424 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593548387097 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5644110634 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110493005582 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379371115016 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416807907546 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754690054505 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275189415162 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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